HW 33

For Kevin (T/W Team), 
Great post and wonderful thoughts!  It's most certain that we are offered plenty of alternatives but, unfortunately most decide to ignore such opportunities.  Moving to Canada wouldn't be a bad idea either.  I don't have any major criticisms about your post.  Of course, these are your culminated thoughts on this unit.  Maybe one thing would be to be more aware of the first, second, and third person uses/perspectives.
For Amber (T/W Team), 
I loved that you took full advantage of the amount of writing you wanted to provide.  Though I think a mere paragraph would've sufficed, your writing was most certainly appreciated.  The questions you stated at the end of your last paragraph definitely proved to be thought-provoking.  I also agree that we are selfish when dealing with such things like death and illness.  I realize that these three paragraphs are your thoughts but, also keep in mind the consistency in your structuring.  It's easy to digress from such a topic but, you did great.
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From Amber (T/W Team),
You did a nice job of weaving in some beauty throughout your post. It was interesting to read about your sum up of this unit. While reading this I became well aware of your thoughts about hospitals and how they present themselves as factories in our society. While reading through this I found myself shaking my head a few times; not because what you had to say was bad, but because most of what you had to say was true to some extent. You are right, there are many different ways one can look at hospitals and this can help shape up ones thoughts about illness and dying and how they intend to deal with their own death. I liked how you used this factory idea with hospitals and connected it to pupils in school. There are many nightmarish atrocities that fill up our society, may it be illness or dying, food or school. 
From Kevin (T/W Team),
I think that this being the last assignment for the unit it was supposed to have a lot of insights you obtained from the unit. I read your piece for those insights. I like how you started with a quote from your peer, an insight someone else had and built off it. I like how you talked about hospitals being factories for dying. You gave good sensory detail and that brought out the insight because it gave a clear idea to what you meant. I think you made another good insight relating it to schools, but they kind of contradict themselves. You are saying that a hospital is an industrialized atrocity because it is like a factory, and then you say that schools are factories too, but they provide good. So keep in mind being clear about what you mean and keep up the good work.
From Spencer (Younger Friend),
I really like how you tied up all your posts into one final statement. You provided a lot of insight into the taboo topic of death and different perspectives on hospitals. In my opinion, hospitals do seem like a 'safe haven', as you said, since one would be so close to help in case of sickness. Hospitals and schools as factories is an interesting insight, I've never thought of that before. Great job on all of your posts and keep up the good work!
From Pam (Mentor),
Bianca, I appreciate your thoughts and musings about hospitals. While I suppose you're right about the "factory" aspect, I really dislike thinking about them this way. Being quite a bit older than you, the chances of my needing a hospital loom a little closer for me. I prefer thinking of them as warm, compassionate centers of healing, no matter how unrealistic that may be.  But, that said, your writing was insightful and thought-provoking as usual. It made me consider my own thoughts about death and dying, as well as my thoughts about the results of fear in a "civilized" society. I have enjoyed reading your blog - thanks for sharing it.  Your comments about school are a great arguments for homeschooling.  Just wanted to throw that in...